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my surrenderSuddenly, I saw a flash of movement out of the corner of my eye and instinctively froze. My whole body tensed with energy, eyes darting to and fro as I searched for any other signs of life. To my right was an ancient tree as wide as a car, concealed in pale green moss, and I turned slowly with my back to it. My throat went dry and I suddenly could taste nothing but the sweet, metallic blood of the rodent I’d gulped down two days ago. I nearly dry-heaved it back up. My empty stomach twisted in protest, seeming to cave in on itself. I spread my palm over it, fingers digging into my thin frame, bumping over the exposed ribs like the keys of a piano. My breathing quickened, and the dank jungle air whooshed through my open mouth, flooding my nose with its earthy, pungent scent.At first all I could sense was his presence. It was like my energy field suddenly extended and clashed with his, and every hair on my body stuck out straight. Then, a low snarl, the soft rustle of a leaf,